Genre: YA Cyberpunk
Word Count: 77,000
(Note: I recommend maximizing this video so you can read the words at the beginning...unless you have a tiny-word-reading superpower. :-P Also, if you just see a huge blank space, give it a sec. I swear the video will appear.)
I love the way this pitch opens & closes! Awesome job. (Plus, the premise just sounds interesting. ;)). Good luck! #26
ReplyDeleteHi Brianna,
ReplyDeleteWhat an intense video, lol. I loved the beginning, I'm not sure how you pulled that off! And the ending is great, too... I was like, what the hell? Where's that beeping coming from?!?! I wished I could have heard more, though, only because I'm a huge fan of cyberpunk, and a minute is too short for me :D Corrupted sounds really cool — good luck!
John Krissilas, #40
http://www.johnkrissilas.com/
Great video pitch! The beeping freaked me out at the end! I loved that it was short and not-sweet-but-creepy! It perfectly set the tone for your novel. Good luck! #41
ReplyDeleteVery cool opening and closing! I love it! You set the tone for your book wonderfully! Nice, nice job!
ReplyDeleteI'm with everyone else. The beginning and end were awesome. Great job.
ReplyDelete#5
Very interesting pitch. The style is super creative-the computer opener, the equipment in the room, the secret-style video. I like it, and I get a good sense of the oppressive world of the book's setting.
ReplyDeleteBut that beeping scared the hell out of me! ; )
Wow! If only I read the comments first, I wouldn't have freaked out at the beeping! :D Great job setting up the premise with the structure of the video itself!
ReplyDeleteThat was great! :) I don't know how to do anything cool like that!
ReplyDeleteLove the set up of this pitch and the beeping... it scared me but it was cool. Great concept with high stakes. Good job.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job with this pitch! It startled me when it started beeping. Lol!
ReplyDeleteGood job on this- great production! I hope to see your story in print one of these days.
ReplyDeleteOMG I totally thought you gave my computer a virus! Great video!
ReplyDeleteLoved the concept. Fingers crossed for you!
ReplyDelete#32
I love how you tied the pitch in with the story concept. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI got scared with that beep at the end, and the immediacy and intensity of the premise is there. Good Luck with this!
ReplyDeleteThat ending part was crazy! I thought it was some alert on my computer. Really awesome addition.
ReplyDeleteLOVE this!! All of it. What a creative pitch. WELCOME to the next round ;o) I believe this is the same I picked for Pitch Madness and I'm going to pick it again. 'cause I'm totally intrigued!! Congrats!!
ReplyDeleteI love cyberhackers! And I love how you incorporated that into your pitch--very creative!
ReplyDeleteCongrats on being picked for the next round! :)
I love the beginning of that! Very cool. Congrats on being picked for the next round!! :)Good luck with it. I'm a new follower btw, it's very nice to meet you!
ReplyDelete#38
P.S. Are you aware that your word-verification is on? Sometimes people with fairly new blogs don't realize, so I thought I'd mention it. If you want to turn it off, you can just Google, "How to turn off Captcha" and it will walk you through it.
LOL! I love it! Very creative and cute!
ReplyDeleteI did use my superpower to read the small words. Congrats on the agent round! Great to meet you! :D
Cool, nicely done and interesting.
ReplyDeleteWoah. Loved the beginning and ending! And, of course, the middle. This sounds really interesting- cyberpunk? Yes, please :)
ReplyDeleteThanks all for the woderful comments and feedback! You guys rock. ^_^
ReplyDelete